Comments on: Dead Names and Broken Smiles http://ashleywrites.org/2006/11/18/dead-names-and-broken-smiles/ about life, death, and everything else Thu, 29 Jul 2010 11:34:34 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.0.5 by: emily http://ashleywrites.org/2006/11/18/dead-names-and-broken-smiles/#comment-7 Wed, 27 Dec 2006 17:53:49 +0000 http://ashleywrites.org/2006/11/18/dead-names-and-broken-smiles/#comment-7 I really liked your use of language. I knew what was going to happen but that is okay because the story is meant to be a heart wrenching realization. Good stuff! P.S. Just an idea: maybe you should leave the girl Lisa's name out of the story and refer to her as just "she"? I really liked your use of language. I knew what was going to happen but that is okay because the story is meant to be a heart wrenching realization. Good stuff!

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Just an idea: maybe you should leave the girl Lisa’s name out of the story and refer to her as just “she”?

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